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Yael Aldana's avatar

simple and lovely!

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Jane Hanson's avatar

Edited to the essential ...concentrated on a great line which was the essence of the idea.Well done and hi from sunny Yorkshire .

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Marc Brimble's avatar

thanks. I thought maybe I had edited it too far

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Luke's avatar

This resonates...

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Luke's avatar

“Embrace / of all these excellent strangers” feels like a wonderful definition of the group experience.

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Marc Brimble's avatar

thanks. The piece was originally much longer but I thought most of it really didn't express the feeling adequately. By the time I finished editing I was left with this. Glad you like it.

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Luke's avatar

It’s so hard to kill lines and then it can be so beneficial for the overall story!

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